My even more late work that Im about to turn in (Writing)

well I think im going to cut straight into this one

so here is the goal Use “show not tell” when appropriate.

you might realize i already did this well i did it again

ahh well here is my story.

Today is a big day kids we are going to the mall

Aww not now after this

Well we are meeting up with your aunty so hurry up

Witch one 

Aunty Alex 

Finished

Ok shoes and socks on then get n the car don’t forget your jersey okay i'll be waiting

Babies in the car waiting and crying

Ok ready let's go

Mum whats for lunch

Well my son that's what we are going to get with your aunty

Mum green light

What do you want from the mall

Headphones 

No food

Sushi

Ok lets go your auntys shouting

Im shouting you said you are anyways how’s the baby

Good wait WHERE IS HE!

Why is mom sweating, an crying, and shaking

WHERE is HE where is HE!

Calm down lets split in 2s

Uhhh aunty there are only 3 of us oh okay go with your mum if you find the baby call let's go!

Um mum where are we going

To find your brother oh he walked into pack and save

Why didn't you tell me

Not my job it's yours

Ok im calling your aunty

Why

BECAUSE THE BABY IS IN PACK N SAVE

No he’s right here

Oh okay

Can we go home now

Yes and ill call your aunty and say i found the baby and we're going home

Ok

Get in the car and plug in your baby brother

Guess what son

What i bought you the headphones you want well you were plugging in your brother

Thanks mum!

Thew wow that was a tough day.

Howd ya like i bet you didn't even read it

well if you did you would answer my question ( the question it at the bottom )

well bye.

Did you spot the show not tell?